Peer Review

“[The trickster] is the spirit of the road at dusk, the one that runs from one town to another and belongs to neither.” – Lewis Hyde – italicize this quote

The trickster is a wanderer, a disturber of that which we hold to be true; it is a boundary breaker, and an imaginative spirit. Though the trickster is usually portrayed by a male in folklore, the trickster can be found all around us, and more so even in ourselves. (Possibly talk more about the trickster’s past and how it was created; I don’t know who Lewis Hyde is or what exactly this came from. Maybe along with putting who said it, put the book or whatever it is quoted from.)

New paragraphI have always been incredibly independent, just like the trickster (there could be a lot more added on to this sentence; possibly more descriptive. It’s a bit short for an opening sentence that is about to describe you). When I was six years old, I decided that I was old enough to make my own decisions. (Like running away?) Proclaiming this to my mother, I made my way out into the world, looking for a boundary to push, a place for my wandering soul (this term is used a lot. Maybe try alternating ‘wandering’ to a different synonym every now and then,) to gravitate towards.  I ended up at a neighbor’s house, inviting myself inside for a glass of water and an intellectual chat – (could also say, “well…” instead of ‘or at least’) or at least the most intellectual chat a six-year-old can have with an adult. When I grew tired of my neighbor’s company and returned to my house, my mother was furious. But I was indignant, sticking to my belief that I was old enough to do what I wanted, and to go where I pleased.

New Paragraph – I have maintained my wandering spirit over a vast span of years; relying on my imagination to take me on wild adventures where I could not physically go. Like the trickster, I yearn to travel through the night, never settling on one place, disrupting the world with fierce independence and chaos, and shaping ideas and lives through art.

–       I like the idea that Rebekah is going off of, comparing oneself to a fictional character. While it isn’t the most important part of the bio, I think it would help if she explained more of exactly what the trickster is. If she talked more in detail with the story about herself as a kid, I think it would work out better. Since it’s a biography I think her main story about leaving home should be the longest part of this piece. Maybe talk more about the journeys she took around the neighborhood, finding new areas to explore or something funny that she has been told by her parents about herself when she was younger. Just this tiny bit made me want to read more about her life as a kid; it reminded me of my brother and myself as we would always seem to scare our parents half to death with the antics we got into. It made me smile to reflect on my stories just from this little bit of Rebekah’s past. I think she could also add in a bit more comedy to it; the more drastic and shocking the better. I could almost hear the author chuckling in it at points, shocked at her own past choices, and I think that’s a great thing to have. I definitely was able to laugh in parts of it, and so if there was even more of that it would be such a great start to get someone interested in reading the rest of Rebekah’s portfolio!

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